Final Poster

We decided to create a more polysemic poster, the wood signifying the coffin and the blood signifying the vampire. The poster however does not give away that the protagonist is a vampire nor does it reveal the identity of the characters since the actors are not famous.

Posters

I wanted to signify vampires withoutusing a face since none of our cast are famous. Hence I like the first but it will need to be made clearer as to the narrative. I will need to add a rating, a release date, a slogan and titles to them. 

Problems we had with the technologies in creating the product.

We had a lot of sound files which made the production very complicated.








 It was also difficult to add the titles in too which is why I made them a flash file and why there is a spelling mistake. 

  I was good at adding the blue filter and although it didn't make my preferred reading and look like night it did look like a dream.

How our film uses develops or challenges the codes and conventions of a real media product.

The wood is an inter-textual link to twilight.

The coffin is an intetextual link to the story of Dracula.













The blonde girl was to signify a scream queen like in Brotherhood of Blood


The flashbacks were in a blue filter to signify a dream as in many movies.

The soundtrack reflected the noises of the forrest much like other soundtracks such as the Titanic one.

The titles were an inter-textual reference to Halloween

The surprise in finding out the girl was a vampire came from Buffy the Vampire Slayer 

Developing the Narrative

We started originally by having the protagonist beginning in her bedroom  se walks down the street on her phone. The boyfriend finds her with a dead body and backs away. We end with her the next day as she's received a text saying how could you. 

The next Idea was that we had her meeting up with her boyfriend the boyfriend screams and runs away and again she receives a tex

t.

The last idea involved her metting up he has set a camp up for her they approach, he turns around but she chases him she wakes up in a coffin. 
We decided to have her meeting him in the forrest because she can't face other people but needs to tell her boyfriend. She rings him wondering where he is. Their is a stalker following her she screams. The boyfriend runs for her. By this time is a lot of narrative enigma as to the identity of the villain. We realise she is a murder because she is stood next to a dead body then we realise she's a vampire.  She wakes up from a dream but then she realises she is in a coffin and that it turns out to be true. 

Final Cut

Looking Back at the prelim task what do you feel you have learnt in the proggression to the full product?

We begun with some well thought out mise en scene and camera angles similar to our Swede. The cinimatography was our strength. However unlike the swede we had to design a narrative which was difficult because we were trying to include 3 intertextual links used but neither of them made sense in the narrative which were: the coffin, the forrest and vampires. We also chose them because we had them available and wanted to make it look good. Eventually we decided she was in the forrest because she wanted to tell her boyfriend alone away from the temptation to bite. She was being stalked by a jelous boy but in the end it was her that bit him. She woke up in a coffin because she thought it was all a dream but then she realises its real and that she fell asleep in a coffin. We then had to think of a relevant title which was difficult because so many have allready been taken. We chose "Mistake" the mistake being her inability to resist bitting the stalker and making her boyfriend realise she is a vampire. I believe we shot the footage we had to have 2 days if shooting due to the rain this enabled us to plan more carefully our shots. Casting was difficult because it involved actors who were available which is why eventually we had to act act as the cast. Editing the shots wasn't difficult but creating anchorage was. This is why we added voice over and a soundtrack. Finding and editing all sundfiles was difficult because they all overlapped I also had to get the music withou gaps in. You may notice camera tapping noises in the diagetic sound this is because I didn't notice this during the edititing process and if i had noticed it, it would have been too difficult to loacate the files and edit them to a fluid sound. The voice over was dificult to match to the footage yet still create narrative engima and make sense. The production company titles could have been spent more time on since they are of similar colours. The main titles are good because they match the genre.

In all I believe our product is intertextually and visually well designed but it lacks anchorage and sound quality. This is different from the swede because the narrative and sounds were allready designed.

Rough Cut 3

In what ways does your media product use, develop or challenge forms and conventions of real media product?

We have a female villain which is countertypical she is blonde to challenge the conventions and suprise the audience.The story is based on vampires therefore the use of a coffin, forrest, blood and romance is stereptypical of the gothic horror genre genre.However more countertypically it is centred around teenage romance which is more in lign with modern movies such as Twilight and True Blood. We added the blue to this to signify nightime but it signified more a dream to our audience which we kept as it was also our preffered reading.

How does your media product represent particular social groups?

We countertypically have a female protaganist and villain who is violent yet stereotypically romantic. All the actors are young which is stereotypical as a lot of mischief occurs. The actors are all able and white which is stereotypical due to avaialability of disabled or black actors we also fail to represent homosexuals. Countertypically although this is a british film it doesn't show the idillic middle class view of british people.

What kind of media institution might distribute your media product and why?

Hammer Horror used Universal but in moder times they would be too expensive so I would use a cheap distributer such as the one Warp X use optimum releasing as the audience will be uk based.

Who would be the audience for your media product?

13-25 UK based both male and female and working class.

How did you attract/address your audience?

Using a young cast to attract a young audience. Adding romance to gain female interest with horror aand fantasy apealing the male audience. The use of Britain not in the idilistic view that films such as Bridget Jones diary are in signifies the film is intended for a smal local UK based audience. We signified the prefered reading by putting the clips in order.

What have you learnt about technologies from the process of constructing this product?

was difficult because we had to use the unedited original footage in order to change the colouring.The sound needs inproving perhas re- recording to get it all the same level. Camera's look best on a fixed tripod rather than moving them or trying to track them. We don't have enough coffin clips this scene may need re-shooting. The voiceover needs improving to provide more anchorage . The church images are not needed and do not make sense.

How our film appeals to a modern audience

We chose the gothic horror genre beause it combines the use of fantasy, romance and horror which appeals to modern audiences. The top 3 films [IMDB] in box office this week begining 26/04/10 are  "How to Train Your Dragon" which is a family fantasy adventure our film contains elements of fantasy by including vampires. The next film is "The Back-Up Plan which is a Rom Com our film contains elements of romance between the vampire and her boyfriend. The next film is "Date Night" which is described by IMDB as a thriller, comedy, romance which again our film includes elements of. A recent film of the month  is "Twilight: New Moon" which is a gothic horror fantasy romance and made $142,839,137  on the opening weekend. [NEW MOON IMDB]  So as you can see my genre appeals to modern audiences. Ashes to Ashes series 3 is renowned for using lots of polysemy andf narrative enigma. Episode 4 featured the protaganist having visions of herself in a coffin it signified serialism by using serial lighting much like we did in the forrset scene. The blue filter in ours was originally supposed to signify night but it signified more a dream which it was. The red lighting in our coffin scene is intended to confuse the audience and create polysemy as to the setting of reality and create narrative enigma as to the outcome of the protaganist. Red also signifies blood, passion and love issues which surround our prtaganist while blue signifies the cold, saddness and horror.

Rough Cut 2

In what ways does your media product use, develop or challenge forms and conventions of real media product?
We have a female villain which is countertypical she is blonde to challenge the conventions and suprise the audience.The story is based on vampires therefore the use of a coffin, forrest, blood and romance is stereptypical of the gothic horror genre genre.However more countertypically it is centred around teenage romance which is more in lign with modern movies such as Twilight and True Blood. We added the blue to this to signify nightime.

How does your media product represent particular social groups?
We countertypically have a female protaganist and villain who is violent yet stereotypically romantic. All the actors are young which is stereotypical as a lot of mischief occurs. The actors are all able and white which is stereotypical due to avaialability of disabled or black actors we also fail to represent homosexuals. Countertypically although this is a british film it doesn't show the idillic middle class view of british people.

What kind of media institution might distribute your media product and why?
Hammer Horror used Universal but in moder times they would be too expensive so I would use a cheap distributer such as the one Warp X use optimum releasing as the audience will be uk based.
Who would be the audience for your media product?
13-25 UK based both male and female and working class.

How did you attract/address your audience?

Using a young cast to attract a young audience. Adding romance to gain female interest with horror aand fantasy apealing the male audience. The use of Britain not in the idilistic view that films such as Bridget Jones diary are in signifies the film is intended for a smal local UK based audience. We signified the prefered reading by putting the clips in order.

What have you learnt about technologies from the process of constructing this product?

We changed the purple
to

It was difficult because we had to use the unedited original footage in order to change the colouring.

The sound needs inproving perhas re- recording to get it all the same level. Camera's look best on a fixed tripod rather than moving them or trying to track them. We don't have enough coffin clips this scene may need re-shooting. The voiceover needs improving to provide more anchorage . The tripod didn't need the muffler on and the original diagetic sound was better the scream will need re-recording.

Soundtrack

I have chosen the following soundtrack for Rouch Cut 2 because it disettles the audience yet to begin with is slow pace with long drawn out notes to get the audience off guard therefore shock them more. The use of windinstruments reflects the birdsong in the forrest just as in Titanic the music reflects the engine sounds of the ship. The music speeds up to increase the pace of the chase though in the first draft of it it was too pacy over the coffin scene which is meant to be slow. So for the second draft of it I slowed it down here to create a further climax for the titles. The guitar appeals to a modern audience and reflects the boystrous contetypical representation of a female vampire lead. This music came frome smaples in Adobe Sound Booth their website [LINK] states

"2.6 Restrictions on Use. You may not: use, copy, modify, or transfer copies of the Audio Content except as provided for in this License; remove any proprietary notices or labels from the Audio Content; redistribute, sell, duplicate, or rent the Audio Content except as a non-separable part of a derivative work as noted herein; or rent, lease, sublicense or assign the Audio Content or any copy thereof to another person or legal entity. Other than as part of your own original compositions, you may not modify adopt translate, reverse engineer, decompile, disassemble, or create derivative works based on the Audio Content"

I chose not to include the music in rough cut 3 and the final cut because it is a grey area. I made the next soundtrack using cubase and a proffesional musician to create the most fitting music. The difficulty came in editng the music as one yet to still fit the footage. The music invlovels obeos, violins and tamberins choosing wind instruments to reflect the sounds of the forrest. I added an organ at home as an intertextual link to gothic horror. I used the faders in
Imovie to make the music less disjointed and make it climax at points throughout the production.

Raw Footage

We have a female villain which is countertypical she is blonde to challenge the conventions and suprise the audience.



The story is based on vampires therefore the use of a coffin, forrest, blood and romance is stereptypical of the gothic horror genre genre.

However more countertypically it is centred around teenage romance which is more in lign with modern movies such as Twilight and True Blood.

How does your media product represent particular social groups?
We countertypically have a female protaganist and villain who is violent yet stereotypically romantic. All the actors are young which is stereotypical as a lot of mischief occurs. The actors are all able and white which is stereotypical due to avaialability of disabled or black actors we also fail to represent homosexuals. Countertypically although this is a british film it doesn't show the idillic middle class view of british people.

What kind of media institution might distribute your media product and why?
Hammer Horror used Universal but in moder times they would be too expensive so I would use a cheap distributer such as the one Warp X use optimum releasing as the audience will be uk based.

Who would be the audience for your media product?
13-25 UK based both male and female and working class.

How did you attract/address your audience?
Using a young cast to attract a young audience. Adding romance to gain female interest with horror aand fantasy apealing the male audience. The use of Britain not in the idilistic view that films suchas Bridget Jones diary are in signifies the film is intended for a smal local UK based audience. We signified the prefered reading by putting the clips in order.

What have you learnt about technologies from the process of constructing this product?
The sound needs inproving perhas re- recording to get it all the same level. Camera's look best on a fixed tripod rather than moving them or trying to track them. We don't have enough coffin clips this scene may need re-shooting.

Rough Cut

In what ways does your media product use, develop or challenge forms and conventions of real media product?

We have a female villain which is countertypical she is blonde to challenge the conventions and suprise the audience.The story is based on vampires therefore the use of a coffin, forrest, blood and romance is stereptypical of the gothic horror genre genre.However more countertypically it is centred around teenage romance which is more in lign with modern movies such as Twilight and True Blood. We added the blue to this to signify nightime.

How does your media product represent particular social groups?

We countertypically have a female protaganist and villain who is violent yet stereotypically romantic. All the actors are young which is stereotypical as a lot of mischief occurs. The actors are all able and white which is stereotypical due to avaialability of disabled or black actors we also fail to represent homosexuals. Countertypically although this is a british film it doesn't show the idillic middle class view of british people.

What kind of media institution might distribute your media product and why?

Hammer Horror used Universal but in moder times they would be too expensive so I would use a cheap distributer such as the one Warp X use optimum releasing as the audience will be uk based.

Who would be the audience for your media product?

13-25 UK based both male and female and working class.How did you attract/address your audience?

Using a young cast to attract a young audience. Adding romance to gain female interest with horror aand fantasy apealing the male audience. The use of Britain not in the idilistic view that films such as Bridget Jones diary are in signifies the film is intended for a smal local UK based audience. We signified the prefered reading by putting the clips in order.

What have you learnt about technologies from the process of constructing this product?

The purple is too purple. The sound needs inproving perhas re- recording to get it all the same level. Camera's look best on a fixed tripod rather than moving them or trying to track them. We don't have enough coffin clips this scene may need re-shooting. It needs a voicover to provide anchorage. The tripod didn't need the muffler on and the original diagetic sound was better the scream will need re-recording.

Narrative Explanation

Notional BBFC rating

If I were to rate this film I would say that it uses no swear words, no drugs, no discrimination, no nudity. But it uses mature themes of death and mistakes, horror and frightening situations, gore and violence in short takes. Sex is implied but not shown. Therefore I would rate it at 12 [BBFC]

Exhibition and Distribution and Target Audience

A cheap horror film such as donkey punch used the distributer of optimum releasing also. Hammer Horror used the distributer of J. Arthur Rank Film Distributors Universal Pictures and Warner Home Video. Twilight's main distributer was Summit Distribution though since my film has no budget I would use Optimum Releasing as in donkey punch.  

The title Mistake is polysemic so the image I use would have to be too to draw the audience in to find out the preffered reading. Twilight's image signifies love which attracts a female audience The ginger hair colour appeals to those that feel as though they are outsiders as ginger signifies this therefore signifies the narrative is emotional and relatable. The pale colours and red eyes of the man however  appeal to mainly men who are interested in gothic horror. The use of youthful characters appeals to a younger audience. A lot of films try to appeal to a younger audience because it is stereotypical for youth to be less sensible with their money. I will use youths and signify love similarly to twilight. However  I will also use the male gaze and blood in mine to appeal to a male audience. I also like the way this poster to the left has used red typography to signify the genre. Like Hot Fuzz did if I were to make this in the real world I might make a game, a website a madam tusaudes exhibit and distribute through deals with McDonalds.  The best way of drawing an audience in is through trailers If I were to make one I only show the pinnacle moments of the equilibrium disequilibrium and leave the resolution polysemic to create narrative enigma. I will have a female voice over and titles in a gothic font to signify the genre as horror/ romance. All the exposition would have to show vampires to appeal to a gothic male audience. Many cheap horror film's use television  nowadays to exhibit their product Zone Horror channel advertise a film a month with their Horror of the Month. The problem with television advertising is that the trailer would have to be re-made or put post watershed.

Alternativr Production Company Logo's

Deciding a Vampire Image

To start off experimenting with a vampire image I put just the fangs on. I found that the best facial expression was with the mouth just slightly open the more open m mouth was the more the falsness of the teeth was revealed. Also a low angle shows off more of the fangs. This image is too natural and not frightening or believable.

For the next image I I added grey, white and black makeup this made me look more undead and was scarier.

For the next image I added blood this is good because it focuses the audiences attention on the fangs and appeals to a male audience because it signifies violence.

For this next image to the right I wet my hair and spiked it up this signifies teenage well.

Slicking back my hair was like the vampires such as on Dracula but was not realistic or modern in appearance therefore not as believable I will probably use a vampire with dry hair, blood round their mouth, pale make up and red contact lenses.

Gothic Horror in Television

Because TV is lower budget than film and more contained I will look at it to get more ideas for my opening.

Buffy the Vampire Slayer Season 1 Episode 1 [IMDB]

• Begins with a panning long shot of a mansion with and it is dark to signify horror
• The high pitch piano notes are also a signifier of the genre
• The colouring looks slightly black and white to signify the authentic Dracula films and a flashback
• The camera tracks roun a classroom the baroness signfifies fearfullness the desks signify a classroom and the biological mise en scene forboades the narratives of blood thirst.
• The slow violins relax the audience
• The smaishing sound is unpredictable therefore frightens the audience
• The man comes through first which is a stereotypical representation of gender as men are powerfull and brash and signifies he is the protaganist
• The woman is blonde and has a low cut top to appeal to the male gaze
• The 2 are young which is countertypical of the genre and apeals to a younger audience
• They use the false scare of the trap door opening to mislead the audience into the preffered that the girl is a victim
• The girl is counterypically a powerfull vampire
• The red sans serif gothic title signify the genre and the rock music appeals to a teenage audience. 

 Young Dracula Season 1 Episode 1 [IMDB]

• The first shot pan's from the unconventional daylight sky to an english village which is countertypical of the genre and an american audience would not understand the preffered reading of it as it is not stereotypical britain and famous landmarks
• The use of a child's voice signifes it is made for children and the harp signifes a peacfull atmosphere
• The takes are polysemic shots of a village to create narrative enigma that become closer to the setting of the characters
• The binary oposites of Dracula's gothic horror car, the rural village, the harp music and the lightening sound create humour
• From the lightening sound there is a shot of the protaganists face saying "I'm a vampire" which is counterypical because it is a normal looking child
• The sound of a choir and low piano notes begins and wee see the special effekt of a castle with a storm above it.

True Blood Season 1 Episode 1 [IMDB]

• Begins with counterypical upbeat music and the shot of traveling up road at night
• Then a counterypical shot of a woman driving with a man sleeping the shot is a two shot signifying they are in a relationship
• The female is dressed in a low cut top, flirtatios and blonde to appeal to the male gaze she expresses her teeth a lot which signifies she could be a vampire
• A sexual activity is signified by a cut away shot of the bans face and woman smiling at him
• The use of a sexual actitvity and 20-30 year old actors signifies the inteded audience is 16-40
• The signify that the universe within the camera is fantasy by the use of a sign wich says "We have tru blood" and a news inteview with a vampire.

The Vampire Diaries Season 1 Episode 1 [IMDB]

• The man is stereotypically driving
• Conventionall it is dark and a mysterios object is stood in the road
• The use of the windscreen crach signifes it's high budget
• The use of 20-30 year old actors and violence signifies its for a 16-40 year old audeice mal and low class
• The music is rock music to apeal to a younger audience
• The use of a smashed windscreen signifies the production is high budget
• The music pitch lowers and slows as the realisation intenisifies
• The blolnde female stereotpycally cries and is a victim who stays in the car and calls for help while the male goes out to have a look
• The slow music settles the audience and get's them unready for the realisation the body is a vampire and is about to jump up and bite the male
• The vampireness is signified by a close up on the biting
• The titles are red and sans serif to signify the genre

Gothic Horror in Literature

Gothic Horror began in the 18th Century as a genre of horror that combines both romance and horror. it is generally believed to have been invented by the English author Horace Walpole, with his 1764 novel

The Castle of Otranto [WIKI]

• 3 people get married but the groom is crushed by a helmet that falls from the sky
• Another lord desperatly marries the bride becasue he believes the grooms death was a signifier of his own downfall
• The bride escapes to a castle with the help of a peasant
• The lord orders the killin of the peasant
• The peasant helps the bride escape to a church and as the peasant lifts his shirt to be killed the lord realises the peasant is his son
• They are interupted in the killing by knights who beg for the bride
• The lord  rushes of to free the bride from the castle where he thinks she is
• The lords daughter frees the peasant from being locked up
• The peasant goes to the church where the bride is
• The peasant hides the bride in a cave and fights on of the knights
• He wounds the knights who is the brides father
• The lord stabs the bride thinking it is his daughter
• The peasant is then revealed to be the true Lord of the land who marries the bride

The narrative is unlike today's gothic horror because the characters are all human. However it does invovle castles, churches and a sense of class and power.

The first use of vampires was used in WAKE NOT THE DEAD by Johann Ludwig Tieck but the first famous vampire story was:

The Vampyre by John William Polidori [WIKI]

• Aubrey meets the mysterious Lord Ruthven
• Aubrey accompanies Ruthven to Rome, but leaves him after Ruthven seduces the daughter of a mutual acquaintance
• Aubrey becomes attracted to Ianthe
• Ianthe tells Aubrey about the legends of the vampire
• Ruthven arrives at the scene and shortly thereafter Ianthe is killed by a vampire
• The pair are attacked by bandits and Ruthven is mortally wounded.
• Ruthven then begins to seduce Aubrey's sister while Aubrey, helpless to protect his sister, has a nervous breakdown.
• Ruthven and Aubrey's sister are engaged to marry on the day the oath ends. Just before he dies, Aubrey writes a letter to his sister revealing Ruthven's history, but it does not arrive in time. Ruthven marries Aubrey's sister, kills her on their wedding night, and escapes

As you can see male again dominates and hierachy is shown now the dominant figure is the vampire yet it still contains elements of love.

One of the most famous Gothic Horror stories is the story of Frankenstein.

Frankenstein by Mary Shelly [WIKI]

 Walton tells his sister the story of Victor Frankenstein and his creature as Frankenstein tells it to him. Walton sets out to explore the North Pole and expand his scientific knowledge in hopes of achieving fame and friendship.
Unfortunately, the ship becomes trapped in ice.
One day, the crew observes a being in the stature of a giant man in the distance on a dogsled. Frankenstein was in pursuit of his monster, when all but one of his dogs from his dogsled died.
He broke apart his dogsled to make oars to row an ice-raft toward the vessel.
Hours later they find Frankenstein, weak and in need of sustenance, near the ship.
Saved by the kind occupants of the ship, Frankenstein starts to recover from his exertion and recounts to Walton his story, warning Walton of the wretched effects of allowing one's ambition to push one to aim beyond what one is capable of achieving.

• Victor Frankenstein (a scientist) is raised by a wealthy family and has an interest in science
• He studies how life decay's and his mother dies from scarlett fever
• He makes the monster and brings it to life but frightened by its apearance he runs away
• His friend is murdered by the monster
• The monster becomes affraid of humans and lives in a cottage he becomes educated and realised his loneliness
• The monster seeks to befriend people even abducting a little boy for companytrying to silence him he kills the boy
• He demands Frankestein makes him a female companion
• Frankestein is unsure another monster could do more harm so the monster gets mad and kills somone else and Frankestein is imprisoned after prison he lives with his father
• The monster kills Frankensteins wife and with grief kills his father
• Frankenstein agress to pusue the monster untill one of them gets killed they end up in the Artic

This was one of the first Gothic Horror stories to include a character that was victim to their power. It's interesting that the narrative is often not known yet the monster is. It is because of the association of Frankenstein the Novel as including the unique significant monster that Frankenstein became known as the monster's name. With so many intertextual references of Frankenstein and Dracula the narrative becomes lost but the charaters remain.

Dracula by Bram Stoker [WIKI]

• Jonathan Harker travels to Count Dracula's crumbling, remote castle to get legal support to Dracula for a real estate transaction overseen by Harker's employer
• Harker falls under the spell of three wanton female vampires, the Brides of Dracula
• He is saved at the last second by the Count, because he wants to keep Harker alive to obtain needed legal advice
• He arrives on the shores of Whitby all of the crew are missing
• Dracula is tracking Harker's devoted fiancée, Wilhelmina "Mina" Murray, and her friend, Lucy Westenra
• Lucy begins to waste away suspiciously.
• Van Helsing immediately determines the cause of Lucy's condition
• Lucy and her mother are attacked by a wolf. Mrs Westenra, who has a heart condition, dies of fright, and Lucy apparently dies soon after.
• Van Helsing, knowing that this means Lucy has become a vampire stake her heart, behead her, and fill her mouth with garlic
• After Dracula learns of Van Helsing and the others' plot against him, he takes revenge by visiting—and biting— Mina at least three times.
• It is only possible to detect Dracula's surroundings when Mina is put under hypnosis by Van Helsing
• Dracula flees back to his castle in Transylvania
• Van Helsing's group, who manage to track him down just before sundown and destroy[3] him by shearing "through the throat" with a knife and stabbing him in the heart also with a knife. Dracula crumbles to dust, his spell is lifted and Mina is freed from the marks.

This is the most famous vampire and therefore although again not an origninal part of the plot this vampire became known as Lord of Vampires because of his fame. All these stories are written pre 20th century Twilight is a book written recently that induced the film.

Twilight by Stephenie Meyer [WIKI]

• Bella who recently moved attracts a lot of competition over her from boy's
• On her first day she is sat next to Edward Cullen who is repuled by her and has to move away
• Bella is nearly run over but Edward saves her
• Bella wunders why he saved her and eventually workes out he is a vampire they fall in love
• James another vampire want's to hunt Bella for sport
• Before she is killed Edward rescues her
• Realising she is bitten Edward sucks the venom from Bella's hand Bella want's to be a vampire but Edward refuses

What made this appeal is because the story is set in a highschool and involves the sweet man vs an unpleasant man which is similar to the narrative of Rom Com's and is relational to a modern audience. Also it appeals to a female audience because the male is considerate about his dominance.

Revised Narrative

Our second narrative was to have the male vampire stalking the girl chasing her and eventually catching up with her and biteing her. The girl wakes up out of a daydream in a classroom and sees the boy she bit on the other side of the classroom  looking embarresed about his mistake of going out with her. She is ashamed by her mistake she couldn't help biteing him but she does she is a victim to her vampireness like in Twillight.